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For more coherent development,
apply Joseph Williams’ principle of “something old/something new.”

When something is first presented, it is “new” information; subsequent references are “old” information.

In the passage below, revise the second sentence so that the point presented in the first sentence (the “old” information) appears at the beginning rather than at the end of the second sentence.

Scanning Electron Microscopy (SEM) and Atomic Force Microscopy (AFM) are complementary technologies. The surface of various materials at various magnifications can be examined using these techniques.

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  Writing for Business and Pleasure            Home
  Copyright by Stephen Wilbers
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Weekly Tip

For more coherent development,
apply Joseph Williams’ principle of “something old/something new.”

 

When something is first presented, it is “new” information; subsequent references are “old” information.

In the passage below, revise the second sentence so that the point presented in the first sentence (the “old” information) appears at the beginning rather than at the end of the second sentence.

Scanning Electron Microscopy (SEM) and Atomic Force Microscopy (AFM) are complementary technologies. They can be used to examine the surface of various materials at various magnifications.

For a description of Joseph Williams' book, Style: Ten Lessons in Clarity and Grace, visit Recommended Reading and Resources.

 

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